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  • Keoma
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    P.S...I like your MOONS!

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  • Keoma
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    well I'll tell you what! I loved this guy from the first picture! He looked sleepy and oh so exhausted! This wood spirit has been busy! He looks old and haggard...busy watching over new forest seedlings perhaps? Thank you for sharing your work with us - it is quite wonderful!

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  • twoclones
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    Not compound. Flexcut tools come with a black coating, over the entire tool shaft, which leaves these marks. Guess I need to take my tools to the buffing wheel and clean off that coating.

    I have made a command decision about my tools. I will soon buy all Dastra tools to replace my Flexcut mallet tools. Flexcut are good but they don't make the assortment of profiles I want and I prefer to have a matched set.

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  • doris
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    yes, these are very nice eyes. great improvement :-)... what is this black mark, stropping compound ?i never get these with my tools

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  • twoclones
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    He can see!

    Other things got in the way so I didn't finish Oak Face but I did manage to give him some eyes. Note the black mark below the eye on left side of photo... My Flexcut tools leave these all too often.

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  • twoclones
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    Nearly completed

    I agree that it's about time to wrap this oak-face up and seal it with something nice. What I immediately noticed in Scott's photo is his eye's iris is coalesced with both the top and bottom lid. I hadn't made note of that before but will from now on.

    I tried comparing the carving profile with the profile of family members but it wasn't much help since all of my family members are wood carvings. Wink

    What I see is that next time I need to start by going much deeper when cutting that initial line from the tip to the bridge of the nose. I'm thinking this would help to get other details right on the first try as well. Today I'll carve the eyes, clean up some lines and hollow the back to reduce the weight for hanging on a wall. At the moment, he weighs 25#.

    Butch
    Great Heron @ http://www.woodhacker.com/heron-1.html

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  • BRIAN D
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    Butch, First of all I think it's a good carving, the only thing I see is if you look at a side view of your first carving where the forehead, nose & eyes are height wise to each other, now go to your second & then study a family member I think you will see your answer. Hope it helps. Have fun! Were all learning. Brian D

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  • doris
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    yes, these eyemounds look fine, i think you maybe could go even more touch deeper at the corners, but cant tell realy from the fotos. they really need look round, not a hint flat... trust your instinct here...then put the eyes. nice going. wonderful change in the carving

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  • Scott Hagerty
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    I like the progress so far with the reshaping of the eyes. There is a picture of a side view of an eye in my tutorial on eyes. I tried to repost it here but alas, the infernal machine won't let me. I can't figure out how to rename it to make it work.

    Try not to let the bottom eyelid get too low on the eye mound, it will look like he is eternally surprised. I don't know if the ugly guy in the pic will be much help. If you look at the dark circles around my eyes it will give you an idea of how low on the face the eye bags go. The mirror can be your friend.

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  • Irishman
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    That's quite a change from your first carving you showed us. He sort of has a Jamican thing going on now with the large dreadlocks. Once you put the eyes in I'd say your pretty well finished. Well done.
    Patrick

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  • Thor
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    Wow. That was cool. I enjoyed seeing the transformation. If it weren't for the hair, I would think that was a different piece of wood.
    Interesting.
    I like it very much by the way...and, you're getting some really good advice on how to further challenge yourself.
    thor

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  • Eddy-Smiles
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    Hey Two Clones.... my first comment is to get over your insecurity problem! My vote goes with Patrick except I'd make no comment at all. Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder. Personally I think that the art of the likes of Salvador Dali and Pable Picasso sucks but as we both no there are million of folks are there who would differ with me. I happen to like your spirit and it doesn't matter what we think... it only matters what you think! In this particular case perhaps the eyes could be more bolden but then again perhaps not! Keep up the great work!

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  • twoclones
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    Little off here, little off there...

    Does this feel like remote control carving for anyone yet?
    Trying to take everyone's advice to heart, I made his face nearly 2 inches wider, extended the forehead, removed most of the eyes and formed new ones, split open the mustache and moved the lip back. Also deepened the bridge of nose, moved the cheek bones toward outer edge, extended the cheek downward by removing hair and deepened the separation between certain locks of hair.

    Still seeking constructive criticism Smile



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  • doris
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    hey thanks on the encouragement for carving oak, i will some day again try :-) ... as for the eyes, yes your second image shows they are too flat. the corners need go much deeper. maybe patricks idea is best, to remove the eyes you have completely, and the recarve the eye mound, and then put the eyes.....

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  • Irishman
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    I know you didn't want to hear it but that's a fine carving. Now, if you wanted to change the style of the carving...here's my feedback from what I've been critiqued on and learned.
    You've got feedback on the nose already.
    I'd consider giving him more forehead next time. If you look in mirror, you'll note where the eyes are in relation to the top of the head.
    In the some general area, you could angle the sides of the head to give him more of a temple. Further down, there should be a slight indent on the outside of the eye area which helps form the cheek bone.
    Speaking of cheek bone, you have them more on the surface and front of the face. Place the cheek bone high and to the outside of the face.
    As for the eyes, your profile shot helps. You have lots of wood to move the eye ball into the socket. From the photo, I would just remove the eye altogether and redo your mound (rounding the wood) again.
    Try using a large gouge on the mustache next time to make some wavy creases, then use your V tool. It gives a more realistic look to the whiskers.
    Hopes this helps.
    Patrick

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